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Ode to the Stars by ~emode:iconemode:

Categories Literature > Poetry > Romantic > Other Romance > Open


If I could wretch a hundred stars from the sky for you, I would
If I could capture the moment before we touch, I’d live in it with you
I’ll propose to you with a million sunset walks on the beach
The taste of salt on your lips
I’ll scream your name out in a crowd, and kiss you in front of them all
I love the silence when you sleep; even more when you break it by breathing
I will dive deeper than is sane, and not find any pearl as beautiful as your face
I could cry to the sound of your silver voice
I could caress your body and never grow old
I could wretch a hundred stars form the summertime sky and sew you a beautiful dress

If only you didn’t say you liked them where they were.
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~Kazzagal May 11, 2009, 3:57:26 AM
So sweet! From a guy's perspective, though? I wonder what (or who) you were thinking of? ^_~

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Why, I'm just as true and honest as dirt. And I'm even more charming than dirt ~ Aly of Pirate's Swoop
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~emode May 11, 2009, 4:16:01 AM
Yeah, from the way I see it it's a guy's perspective

Or who? You're just being mean, now! Totally not telling you!

Actually, it was just an imaginary couple. no one in particular~

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~LittleMissNowhere May 11, 2009, 4:33:12 AM
If I could capture the moment before we touch, I’d live in it with you is an awesome line. I really like the final line too, that seems the main concept to me. Maybe tying that line in more would be good? This is fantastic though :heart:

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~ There's more to life than books, you know; but not much more~
The Smiths
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~Kazzagal May 11, 2009, 4:51:16 AM
Uh huh. ^,^

Just teasing, just teasing ^_~

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Why, I'm just as true and honest as dirt. And I'm even more charming than dirt ~ Aly of Pirate's Swoop
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~Hitomi-no-Envy May 11, 2009, 6:03:46 PM
wow i wish i could write like you =D

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~emode May 11, 2009, 7:18:09 PM
Sure...

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~emode May 11, 2009, 7:20:07 PM
Gosh, I'm not that good ^^;

but thank you~

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~emode May 11, 2009, 7:22:44 PM
I really liked that line as well, but I was uncertain about it, so thanks.
I did think about the last line as well- it did seem a little off to me, all by itself.

Thanks for the advice and for reading!

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~XxLonesomeDovexX Jul 24, 2009, 8:31:14 AM
Oh wow.
That was beautiful.
:heart:
I'm at a loss for words. :hug:

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it was a bad day. the sun exploded;
the earth roiled and tore entire cities asunder;
the bus in front of my car crashed violently and everyone died;
i ran out of green tea.

~ ohsostarryeyed :sun:
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